Every Day the Protagonist Wants to Capture Me – I need beta readers

Looking for beta readers

Hi everyone, so you may or may not have noticed that I have a new project lined up. It’s Every Day the Protagonist Wants to Capture Me. If anyone is willing, could you head on over to the first chapter?

It’s just the first draft. I think it’s okay right now (I wouldn’t have published it if it wasn’t) but I would like to have some feedback.

You don’t have to do anything super complicated. Just read it and let me know what you think. I would especially like to know if there are any typos, grammatical errors, or translation errors. You can just leave a comment on the first chapter’s page.

Hmm, if possible I would also like to get some more advanced feedback. Don’t be shy, if you have a suggestion that can improve some phrases, sentences, or even paragraphs, speak up. I won’t be upset since I am actively asking for feedback.

Some translation stuff:

The title of the novel is 主角每天都想攻略我. This is a bit difficult to translate since 攻略  seems to have many meanings. I initially wanted to title it “The protagonist wants to XXX me every day” but I felt it sounds too suggestive. *cough* The story is actually not R18.

Alternative titles would be:

The protagonist wants to woo me every day

The protagonist wants to guide me every day

Every day the protagonist wants to pursue me

Before I add this title to novelupdates, which title is actually the best??? I want to know your thoughts. A title is very important since it can attract or turn off potential readers.

The raw is here – http://www.jjwxc.net/onebook.php?novelid=2878285&chapterid=1

Thank you for reading this.